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In Reply to: Re: (Looooost...in translation) posted by PeAK on March 17, 2007 at 08:12:30:
"Shoter is more powerful"
"Break up a long sentance into smaller ones"Your writing style also leaves something to be desired.
"It can also play any ripped CD and can also create playlists on the fly."
You don't need "can also" 2 times and playlists is not a word. Why not write
It can also play any ripped CD and create play lists on the fly.
"So it seems that old technology, had a certain quality in its delivery, materially improved soundstage, but less bass."
Overuse of commas, improper use of punctuation, and a missing adjective for quality.
So it seems that the old technology had a certain improved quality in its delivery; materially improving soundstage but providing less bass.
I’m not intending to get into a pissing contest about spelling and grammar, and I'm sure you can find some errors in my grammar as well, but my point is simply this. If I wanted to be the language police I would be embarrassed to critique a post with one containing spelling and grammar errors as yours does.
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Herman...chill and think in the "spirit" of the advice. No police, here. Yes I could have run a grammar checker on my fixes, like you obviously did, and found errors...try that on the original post and I bet your favourite tool would've choked or come out robotic in tone.Spellcheck is not substitute for creating threaded text/thoughts that are easy to understand/powerful. This can only be attained by being aware of your writing weaknesses and by reworking drafts. The book would help, tremendously.
Like I said, my writing was much worse at one point. Man can not live on "valves only" 8^Q
I’m not questioning your spirit or intent, what I find bizarre is that you would take the time to rewrite his post to show him a better way only to have your rewrite full of grammar, style, and spelling errors.I completely agree that “This can only be attained by being aware of your writing weaknesses and by reworking drafts.” Why do you offer this advice when you evidently didn’t do the same when you wrote your critique of the rambling post?
No need to chill as I am not heated, but it does seem odd that you defend your poor writing by saying that it is better than it used to be and better than the other guy. You don’t seem to get my point. I am merely stating that you can't criticize poor writing with an essay full of errors and expect to be taken seriously.
"I’m not questioning your spirit or intent, what I find bizarre is that you would take the time to rewrite his post to show him a better way only to have your rewrite full of grammar, style, and spelling errors."
Twas rather strange weren't tit? :0)A private email to the writer with the suggestion of the book would have been more appropriate perhaps.
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